Thursday, June 4, 2009

BREAK UP

I'm standing at your door step.
You are in your shorts with the door half open.
I enter.
I ask " Do you want to carry on ?"
You say, "No, I was just watching a movie."
I'm standing here and wondering whether you understood the question.
I walk off quietly.
Away from your life.
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11 comments:

Balvinder Singh said...

So much said in so few words.

But so sad.

Quirky Mon said...

love it, just love it. The way you write.

Indian Homemaker said...

Sad... And you conveyed that sadness so well!

i am what i am said...

@Mr Balvinder Singh: thank you sir so much. its sad no doubt but break ups are never happy.

@quirky mon: thanks a lot. i'm glad you liked it so much.

i am what i am said...

@indian home maker: thank you IHM. like i said earlier the sadness has to be there. someone always ends up getting hurt. and more often than not the person who walks off gets hurt too. just speaking from personal experience.

Renu said...

I look forward to ur small stories in a few sentences only, but sometimes i wonder why these misunderstandings and partings..cant be there something to get them united?

Aniket said...

Great narration and stark emotions packed in the piece.

Acknowledgment is so very essential in any relation.

Rahul Viswanath said...

Break ups have a lesson to be told ..... I think life moves on from there for better :)

Solilo said...

Gunmeen, few words but it conveyed a huge decision.

You are really good at it. I love reading your 55-ers.

Ki said...

EEp. I'm speechless!

Good stuff :)

Shravan | ശ്രവണ്‍ said...

well done and cheers for the story ! never knew that break ups could happen in this little time :)

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