"When will I be able to play again?"
"Maybe next week."
"I cant wait. I used to play at school. I am my school's best player".
"I'm sure you are."
How could she tell him that he would never walk again let alone play?
A wheelchair was brought in at that very moment.
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14 comments:
hmmm...nice attempt....hope it doesnt have to be true fo anyone ever
tooo sad....
I had heard the saying that "brevity is the soul of wit" but you have also proved that brevity is the soul of fiction.
So few words and so deep a meaning.
Just loved it
Your words pierced more than arrows...great work.
Gunmeen, That was touching.
wow! full story in 55 words which I understood:) with real pathos.
@pinku: thanks. yeah thats true.
@dhiren: it is but i hoped you liked it.
@mr balvinder singh: thank you sir.
@sagar: thank you so much.
@solilo: thanks. i'm glad you liked it.
@renu: thank you.
In the true spirit of the 55er. Really good, with real human emotions.
sad ....u painted the picture pretty well ...
@mr jp joshi: thank you sir
@preeti: thank you
I can see the use of lot of pathos in this. You seem to know the art of 55WF quite well.
Sometimes one needs to break free of the job obligations, just to prove yourself... that you are alive.
Nicely done. ;-)
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heart wrenching...reminded me of a little girl of 11yrs who'd come in news for all the wrong reasons.
An expert swimmer & school champ, she due to negligence of her swimming coach injured her spinal cord & was rendered paralysed waist down ...for life
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