I sit in front of the mirror, looking at the reflection of the sleeping man whom I love.
So peaceful, gentle, handsome, like an angel.
Will I ever be able to leave him?
I let a tears of surrender fall down and begin to apply makeup to cover up the bruises of the night before.
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27 comments:
Oh my God! Brilliant!!!
And it conveys so much! Loved this one!!!!!!
awesome !!
so many of us do it ...surrender ...
very well written
great..absolutely stunning....short but on the nails
I dittoIHM's comment..OMG..this is the same I thought, brilliant !!
Wonderful !!
@I let a tears of surrender
Beautiful :) and you didn't even cheat.
awesome..best one i have read so far :-)
this is a class apart..... you have taken this to a new level !
@to all: thank you so much for appreciating this. it means a lot. thank you all
Wo!! THis is hard hitting!! Among all the 55 words that i have read, this is among the more memorable..
Gunmeen, that is a battered woman's entire married life you summed up in 55 words. Brilliant!
@how do we know: thank you so much
@solilo: thank you so much. i was actually wondering how come you have not commented anything as yet. thanks solilo.
short, simple and very sweet!!!
strong words!! beautifully expressed. 55 word fiction is indeed tough. liked this one :)
Hi,
My first visit here.
I loved how you portrayed the conflict so effectively.
55 word fiction are very tough to write, and you do a swell job at it.
Hope to visit again, if you don't mind.
PS: Totally loved your "About Me". lolz
beautiful.. :)
nice...
Sad..... what else can I say about the experience described here.
It takes the thoughts away from the brilliance of the 55er that you have posted here.
@aruna:welcome to the blog and thank you so much.
@sawan: thanka a lot.
@aniket: welcome to the blog. please do visit again and thank you so much for your encouraging comments. keep writing in. i appreciate it.
@illeen: thank you
@anand: thanks
@Mr JP Joshi: thank you sir so much. i agree with you that it is sad. but there are millions ofwomen out there who go thriugh this everyday.
Will surely do. ;-)
Ma'am, I am floored, 55 words so intense, at 2 a.m, someone once told me that 'a thought is a reaction of the mind towards something true'. Mind blowing! I have become your #1 fan, Jai Ho!!
Intense... game me goose-bumps!!! hard hitting... am at a loss for words! :) its a joy to read your 55 posts!!!
@tushu: thank you so much for your kind words. hope to hear from you more.
@dewdrop: thanks a lot yaar. i'm glad you liked it.
I am echoing all the previous commentators' comments...AWESOME!
I am so hooked to your writing as I go from latest post backwards...
Am following you....
It was very beautiful gunmeen. Am gald i found your blog :)This 55 word fictions is new to me. thnx.
The woman's feeling you have portrayed in these 55 words was awesome.
Visiting u soon.
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